Your Critique Group–A Vital Component

When I first introduced Kamua Okafor in Shanty Gold, he was a slave boy in the crew cabin. He had been sexually abused by the sailors for years.


After the three crew men raped Mary, I wrote that they threw Kamua on top of her and that he, too, molested her.


My very astute critique group, The Pink Fire Writers, cried “FOUL!”


They said I was eliminating the possibility of an extremely interesting relationship between Mary and Kamua.


I shall be forever grateful to authors Sallie Bissell, Susan Blexrud, and Beth Robrecht of Pink Fire for pointing this plot flaw out to me.


Kamua became a hero of Shanty Gold and Mary’s lifelong soul brother.Kamua


Thank you, Pink Fire Writers Group.